soda springs

[billy]

it's only about poetry here, for me. i don't need to know you. but, i need to know if you're a poet or a poser. for my world, writing out how i should write the poem is exchange, the thing which makes us real. that's why i asked you for it specifically. i still need to know if you can't write it or if, instead, you're afraid of looking silly. my take on that is that you can't look as silly as my poem looks, since it's a failed poem... you understand? a real poetry workshop works to invent poetry together, not to invent ego.

for me writing how another poem should be is a little presumptuous.
where do you get it's a failed poem from? and looking silly has never bothered me. i do it all the time. and no emphatically i can't write it. in this instance i'm the critic and you are the poet. and looking at this exchange if anyone did try to rewrite it you'd hang them, commit suicide or both....no offense meant.

for me a workshop is a place where we help each other to write. not a place where we do the write for each other. i told you where it didn't work and to some extent how (for me). that's it. but the dialogue is way off topic. the topic is your poem. was your poem. my say on it has been had. have the last word by all means, dismiss what i say by all means. arguing as to why a person who gives feedback is wrong is not workshopping (not from my pov anyway)