Hidden in the Poppy Field

[alonso ramoran]

Heslopian Image


Hints of Chicory
find shelter in the rouge
of Poppy's bloom,

abstract jutting branches
pose hidden Eutopias, perches
woody green

resting the tautened lace
of flitting Dragonfly
darting about, full day
in Peridot & Sphene;

flouncy wafts
tempt Butterflies
in silks of periwinkle

while root-pillared colonies
stockpile safety
in boulders of sand.

While the imagery of this poem remains lovely, I have to say that I don't know what do with my thoughts after reading this. It was like being given a list of things to do in the middle of nowhere (these things are most enjoyable, I assure you). Since the poem is mostly imagery, I will try to critique the ways you attempted to convey these images. (1) I notice you talk a few times about shelter and a Utopia, may I ask from what? I would think the sun, but otherwise it seems like an unnecessary metaphor(?) because it's scarcely mentioned. (2)Tautened lace; dragonflies, Flouncy wafts; butterflies, nice. (3) I love how you managed to describe an ant colony without resorting to basic description devices. It sounds original.