Hidden in the Poppy Field

[billy]

for me it needs to have more coherence. i don't feel mood of the piece as it reads too clinically and is pretty hard to decipher, a suggestion would be let it flow more instead of making it choppy

Heslopian Image


Hints of Chicory
find shelter in the rouge
of Poppy's bloom,

abstract jutting branches
pose hidden Eutopias, perches
woody green

resting the tautened lace
of flitting Dragonfly
darting about, full day
in Peridot & Sphene;

flouncy wafts
tempt Butterflies
in silks of periwinkle

while root-pillared colonies
stockpile safety
in boulders of sand.