Birthmark (Edit Two)

Birthmark (Edit Two)

hanumang108
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08-07-2017, 06:20 PM

I like how this poem started off and enjoyed some of the imagery, but it seems to lose itself starting at : "Your gut was always stronger than mine." And ultimately go into places that aren’t as poetic as the first half.

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Birthmark (Edit Two) - by fuzzyllama1 - 08-05-2017, 04:51 AM

RE: Birthmark - by Todd - 08-05-2017, 05:17 AM

RE: Birthmark - by Lydish - 08-05-2017, 05:25 AM

RE: Birthmark - by fuzzyllama1 - 08-05-2017, 06:22 AM

RE: Birthmark - by Todd - 08-05-2017, 06:38 AM

RE: Birthmark - by nibbed - 08-05-2017, 11:00 AM

RE: Birthmark - by fuzzyllama1 - 08-06-2017, 12:54 AM

RE: Birthmark (Edit One) - by typing mantis - 08-06-2017, 10:12 PM

RE: Birthmark - by fuzzyllama1 - 08-06-2017, 11:56 PM

RE: Birthmark (Edit One) - by Todd - 08-07-2017, 01:03 PM

RE: Birthmark (Edit One) - by hanumang108 - 08-07-2017, 06:20 PM

RE: Birthmark - by Todd - 08-07-2017, 10:58 PM

RE: Birthmark - by fuzzyllama1 - 08-07-2017, 11:50 PM

RE: Birthmark (Edit One) - by nibbed - 08-10-2017, 02:41 AM

RE: Birthmark (Edit One) - by fuzzyllama1 - 08-10-2017, 03:42 AM

RE: Birthmark (Edit One) - by lyon - 08-10-2017, 05:02 AM

RE: Birthmark (Edit One) - by BeauRessa - 08-11-2017, 02:44 PM

RE: Birthmark (Edit One) - by fuzzyllama1 - 08-15-2017, 07:13 AM

RE: Birthmark (Edit One) - by Dcandy925 - 09-12-2017, 08:04 AM

Birthmark (Edit two) - by fuzzyllama1 - 09-23-2017, 08:54 AM

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