Fourth Edit: Hometown

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I
The moonlight tried to give me solace.
The transparent clouds knew my intention                             I know I said luminescent, but I like translucent better than transparent
as I paused and pretended to ponder
a decision I'd already made.

I thought of that day last summer,                                  
of how my Résumé was stuck in my hand                              L 2 & 3 have me baffled.
like an unwanted love letter,
of how it was best to leave while you were asleep.

II
After retirement, I returned.                                                     I liked after almost a year
You seemed more beautiful than before,                                  because it seems more poetic.
and this made me hate you worse.




Hi, Richard. You have really jumped into
an extensive edit. It will be interesting to
see where this poem is going.


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