07-26-2017, 12:00 AM
I like the ending a lot. I like the dying of the stars and the dying alone by itself on the final line.
The line I'm not sure about is autumn sky. I realize that autumn looks toward winter and the death of all things. It just gives it the feel of something that lingered and then ended. Given that Van Gogh died from a gunshot wound (in the summer), his story seemed to be one that went against the expected progression of life to dying to death.
It's a relatively minor quibble because I think autumn does give you some room as a metaphor. I do really like the last two lines.
Best,
Todd
The line I'm not sure about is autumn sky. I realize that autumn looks toward winter and the death of all things. It just gives it the feel of something that lingered and then ended. Given that Van Gogh died from a gunshot wound (in the summer), his story seemed to be one that went against the expected progression of life to dying to death.
It's a relatively minor quibble because I think autumn does give you some room as a metaphor. I do really like the last two lines.
Best,
Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson