undifined expression

[Pat Doiron]

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“Undefined expression”
 
Pictures I've drawn draw me in, I become one with them
As they are me and mine, a making of my mind
The images of my imagination expressed in several mediums
A multitude of disciplines endlessly creating something within       I can read it more easily without the 'endlessly'
to be set free despite myself

How full am I to burst from that which I can’t converse
But to express in less than words something that hurts or doesn't work
A bleeding heart plain to see set in the open
Its beaten beats bring tears to my eyes
As I defy my will to die

Dry your eyes, open your mind
Flow from what cannot be defined.

your thoughts?

ORIGINAL

Pictures I've drawn draw me in and I become one with them
As they are me and mine, a making of my mind
The images of my imagination expressed in several mediums
A multitude of disciplines endlessly creating something within
To be set free, set free despite myself
 
How full am I to burst from that which I can’t converse
But to express in less than words something that hurts or does not work
A bleeding heart plain to see set in the open
Its beaten beats bring tears to my eyes
As I defy that which would have me die
 
Dry your eyes
open your minds
Flow from what cannot be defined.



I'm by no means a pro of any kind lol , but i do enjoy putting my thoughts on paper in the form of poetry and short lyrical stories. really looking forward to your comments

Hi! I enjoyed reading your poem, I found it to be very musical.
I found the last two lines confusing though. Are you telling yourself that you should dry your eyes, etc., or is this your advice for readers? Maybe you could make it clearer who these last lines are addressed to?  (I think I would like it better if it was you talking to yourself.)

hello typing mantis, thank you much, glad you enjoyed it  I am a musician so it makes sense that it's musical, i see what you mean by taking out "endlessly" sound observation. the last 2 lines are me talking to myself haha. all of this is part of my journey of growth... sometimes we aren't easy on ourselves. the poem essentially talks about expressing self despite not feeling one has the ability to do so openly... for me that is frustrating... sometimes that feeling can't be defined (in my case anyway) so i create something in accordance to that feeling. be it draw, write, compose music, sculpt, forge... whatever... (multitude of disciplines). not sure how to address that (last 2 lines) part of your comment though lol that will require some thought, suggestions are welcome of course    Thanks again for your comment