undifined expression

[Pat Doiron]

“Undefined expression”
 
Pictures I've drawn draw me in and I become one with them
As they are me and mine, a making of my mind
The images of my imagination expressed in several mediums
A multitude of disciplines endlessly creating something within
To be set free, set free despite myself I really like everything before this boldened phrase, the wordiness is fun even
 
How full am I to burst from that which I can’t converse
But to express in less than words something that hurts or does not work
A bleeding heart plain to see set in the open
Its beaten beats bring tears to my eyes
As I defy that which would have me die I thought the internal rhymes in the first part were clever but I think overdone this second part, particularly the boldened part, and 'that which would have' is too wordy I think to end on 'die' 
 
Dry your eyes
Open your minds
Flow from what cannot be defined.the last line seems like it should be the title because the poem is a flow from what you're saying is undefined.  Too statefully matter of fact, could have more impact somehow.



I'm by no means a pro of any kind lol , but i do enjoy putting my thoughts on paper in the form of poetry and short lyrical stories. really looking forward to your comments

really enjoyed that word romp 

yes yes CRNDLSM, thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it. very valid points, i was looking over the poem earlier and made some changes to it based on some of Raspberry Lemonades comments, so i did cut some out. you will be happy to hear that the first bit you boldened was taken out. now it reads simply "to be set free despite myself" along with other redundancies. so thank you for your valued comments