07-11-2017, 09:28 AM
Thanks, Crundalism and Todd. Really good feedback. >
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Crundle: in a couple of places, I couldn't make out what you were getting at.
You both seem to read some protestant undertones to this, and I'm sure that's accurate given my history. I wonder if that impacts the piece negatively, given the original story is "The Fisherman and the Demon" from Arabian Nights.
I appreciate the clarity on what's working thematically so that I make sure I don't stray from that in revisions.
Groovy. I'm working on revising on and off. I do that. It takes a while. But, it will happen. 
< Crundle: in a couple of places, I couldn't make out what you were getting at.
You both seem to read some protestant undertones to this, and I'm sure that's accurate given my history. I wonder if that impacts the piece negatively, given the original story is "The Fisherman and the Demon" from Arabian Nights.
I appreciate the clarity on what's working thematically so that I make sure I don't stray from that in revisions.
Groovy.
I'm working on revising on and off. I do that. It takes a while. But, it will happen.