Mother of Tunnels

[Tiger the Lion]

Hello Rad. A few notes below based on my first read...

Subtitle: Todo el mundo suda - if you want to keep this I would try to include it in the poem proper

O Mother of Tunnels! - I find "O" difficult to pull off without it sounding either archaic or melodramatic or both
Eater of senses! - exclamation marks are a tough thing also - you have 2
I bow to you. 
Your hollows hide 
Your acrid charms. - you employ all caps to start the lines in this strophe, but not the next. Pick one or the other for consistency. I would prefer lower case mid-sentence.

Acolytes whirling, 
Arms akimbo; 
Their howling fills 
the outer worlds. 
Such nakedness 
devours the Earth. 

I come to dig 
Till all is light. - "Till" is a separate word from "until" or " 'til"

Thanks for posting,
Paul