Brothers

[Jase]

yeah, of course. i did this in memory of someone i love so much, how the fuck do you expect me to react when someone calls it "more than a little weak" and gives no good pointers at all? you may as well just say its shit. maybe you shut-ins should try something called a 'shit sandwich', i mean that would have been more appropriate and i wouldn't have reacted badly. if you're all so great at giving advice maybe you should try that instead of just listing everything thats bad about it and not mentioning a single thing you think is good. that isn't how constructive criticism works. was there really absolutely nothing that was worthwhile about it? well i dont fucking care anymore anyway. i tried to do something for him, i failed again, the end. thanks, and you can all go to fucking hell. like i said, no one cares. seriously.

and about the thing with repetition, obviously i know its a massive impact but dont you understand that i repeated it on purpose because that's what its like? i know i didn't do a very good job but its not like i think "my brother is gone forever" just once and then move on with my life. its there all the time in the background and keeps coming back worse and worse. time does not ease it and suicide starts to seem like a good idea, going in circles thinking the same things. its something i will never be able to get over. i tried to convey that but i'm not fucking edgar allan poe. try ramming the rules down my throat some more, that'll work.

yes, i reacted badly. yes, its a touchy subject. yes, the poem is shit. i'm so fucking sorry for that. i've learned my lesson. please close this thread/ban this account.