Fifth Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park

[Richard]

Hey Tectak and Cat,
I must apologize to both of you because I completely missed your feedback. Both of you offer some wonderful suggestions and have got me thinking differently about this piece. Tectak, I greatly appreciate the detail you went into, and I value your ideas because they usually make me think outside my comfort zone.

Thanks again,
Richard

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Hey all,
I've done another edit of this poem. I went in a bit of a different direction, so please let me know if I strayed too far from the original.

Thanks in advance,
Richard