07-02-2017, 02:36 AM
Hi Luna!
This is some solid feedback! I was actually wondering what the correct term would be for referring to mermaids. 'A school of-' sounds rather silly, though. Again, thanks for pointing out some crucial mistakes (I can't believe i've overlooked the juxtaposition in the first stanza)!
Edit: Regarding the Attic, it's the protagonist who catches a glimpse of the mermaid - I'll specify, though
This is some solid feedback! I was actually wondering what the correct term would be for referring to mermaids. 'A school of-' sounds rather silly, though. Again, thanks for pointing out some crucial mistakes (I can't believe i've overlooked the juxtaposition in the first stanza)!
Edit: Regarding the Attic, it's the protagonist who catches a glimpse of the mermaid - I'll specify, though