Fifth Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park

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Fifth Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park

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06-30-2017, 09:56 PM

Hey Todd,
Thanks for you feedback. I have been working on this one recently, and I have actually changed the ending. However, I really like you suggestion about ending with the image of flight. As well, I appreciate your thoughts on trimming down some of the language.

Thanks again,
Richard

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Fifth Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by Richard - 06-07-2017, 12:37 PM

RE: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by vagabond - 06-07-2017, 08:18 PM

RE: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by Richard - 06-07-2017, 09:57 PM

RE: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by homer1950 - 06-08-2017, 12:31 PM

RE: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by Richard - 06-08-2017, 02:08 PM

RE: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by makeshift - 06-10-2017, 08:33 PM

RE: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by nibbed - 06-10-2017, 09:17 PM

RE: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by Richard - 06-12-2017, 01:27 AM

RE: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by Keith - 06-12-2017, 05:29 AM

RE: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by Richard - 06-12-2017, 05:56 AM

RE: First Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by makeshift - 06-14-2017, 05:00 PM

RE: First Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by Richard - 06-15-2017, 06:16 AM

RE: First Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by vagabond - 06-15-2017, 08:01 AM

RE: First Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by Richard - 06-15-2017, 10:02 PM

RE: First Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by tectak - 06-30-2017, 01:47 AM

RE: First Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by The Four-Eyed Cat - 06-30-2017, 02:38 AM

RE: First Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by Todd - 06-30-2017, 03:33 AM

RE: First Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by Richard - 06-30-2017, 09:56 PM

RE: First Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by Richard - 07-03-2017, 03:34 AM

RE: Second Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by lyon - 08-09-2017, 01:27 AM

RE: Second Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by Richard - 08-11-2017, 08:38 AM

RE: Third Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by Richard - 09-01-2017, 05:36 AM

RE: Third Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by Todd - 09-01-2017, 06:00 AM

RE: Fourth Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by Richard - 09-01-2017, 12:16 PM

RE: Fourth Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by just mercedes - 09-03-2017, 12:51 PM

RE: Fourth Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by Richard - 09-05-2017, 04:28 AM

RE: Fifth Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by billy - 09-05-2017, 04:54 PM

RE: Fifth Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by Richard - 09-06-2017, 10:53 AM

RE: Fifth Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by Todd - 09-06-2017, 11:00 AM

RE: Fifth Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by Richard - 09-06-2017, 12:13 PM

RE: Fifth Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by billy - 09-06-2017, 04:47 PM

RE: Fifth Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by just mercedes - 09-06-2017, 05:26 PM

RE: Fifth Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park - by Richard - 09-07-2017, 11:30 AM

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