Tradition

[The Four-Eyed Cat]

This is where I get a bit lost. How can colors go blind? Why would the loss of traditions cause this?
Same thing with music. I don't understand how music would go deaf if traditions died. I think you need to pick one or two of these lines and expand them. May be give a specific example of a type of music that would be lost if tradition was killed. Then from there, go into more detail about why that type of music went deaf.

Generally speaking out of personal experience, people that hold tradition in high regard comment on contemporary arts. 
Allow me to elaborate: 
The Colors go blind - The individual has a grey/shady outlook on today's society, no colors.
The music goes deaf- They dislike the current styles of music
The literature mute - Today's literature does not meet up to their standards
The canvas stays blank - Like literature, it does not meet up to their standards

These lines clearly indicate how important tradition was to the speaker. However, I feel like this point could be explored more. Why are traditions so important to him/her?

Because tradition has died, so have the arts (According to the speaker in S1), the exploration of this goes in the previous lines 

II
 
This is something I've been guilty of more than once, but be careful about mixing your metaphors. Think about this, you've compared tradition to a dead fish and a doomed cow while also starting this stanza by saying it's a corpse. I would suggest picking one and exploring it as much as you can. 
I'll keep that in mind, thank you

 When you say "Long overdue", do you mean tradition's death should have already happened, or do you mean tradition itself is long overdue, so it needs to return? I actually like the ambiguity in this ending. 

Yes, it should have happened a long time ago. Keep in mind, that in S1 and S2, there are two different speakers - both conveying their views on tradition


I think you have a nice first draft here. Your main idea is strong and worth exploring. My main suggestion would be to go into more detail with some of your images, so you express your main idea more effectively.

Cheers,
Richard

Thank you for taking your time to reply to me Richard! Especially the advise on overextions on metaphors is something i will definitely keep an eye out for!