The Vicious Circle Dashed - Edit
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Nicely done Duke. I enjoyed this. There is a slight metrical hiccup when I read L3 aloud. The accent on "Truth" feels forced and L4 is so melodic, I want to go into it with my tongue on a roll. -  Probably a byproduct of your P.S. 

(06-27-2017, 04:14 AM)dukealien Wrote:  The Vicious Circle Stop’t


A Lie can girdle Earth before
the Truth is out of bed ~
but not before Truth’s pillow tweet
can catch and kill it dead.


(in the Nature of a Broadside)

Couldn't find an A rhyme Sad 
(it's out there if you want it bad enough)
Paul
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The Vicious Circle Dashed - Edit - by dukealien - 06-27-2017, 04:14 AM
RE: The Vicious Circle Stop’t - by Tiger the Lion - 06-27-2017, 07:02 AM
RE: The Vicious Circle Stop’t - by RiverNotch - 06-27-2017, 03:05 PM



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