06-26-2017, 03:14 AM
beverage
how do you like your relativi-tea?
dash of fresh cynic lemon squeezed
or sweetened with crystallized dreams?
(the latter only goes with cream)
aah… tastebuds want variety.
Hi vagabond
It doesn't seem short form to me.
The word RELATIVI-TEA makes me think
of having tea with English relatives, but also
thoughts of Einstein's theory, too...
so it's a jumbled thought.
Is there anyway you could cut it down to 3 or 4
words per line and simplify, stay true to form?
I hope you have a better day than my critique!
Best wishes.
Janine
...OOPs, sorry didn't see the change!
how do you like your relativi-tea?
dash of fresh cynic lemon squeezed
or sweetened with crystallized dreams?
(the latter only goes with cream)
aah… tastebuds want variety.
Hi vagabond
It doesn't seem short form to me.
The word RELATIVI-TEA makes me think
of having tea with English relatives, but also
thoughts of Einstein's theory, too...
so it's a jumbled thought.
Is there anyway you could cut it down to 3 or 4
words per line and simplify, stay true to form?
I hope you have a better day than my critique!
Best wishes.
Janine
...OOPs, sorry didn't see the change!
there's always a better reason to love