06-25-2017, 11:50 PM
(06-25-2017, 11:23 PM)The Four-Eyed Cat Wrote: Perhaps swap relativity with variety (i.e. "... your Varia-tea", "....want relativity")thanks for your consideration and the suggestion, thought about it (I wanted to describe versions of relativity.. so in my head swapping these two wouldn´t make sense; also variety doesn´t seem to be something that can be varied)
This way, the two following sentences fit more with first one. (As you actually describe the variety)
Still, i feel that relativi-tea serves no other function than being a pun (Unless you expand on it, of course).
I liked the adjectives you've picked for this poem (Sour lemon =/= Cynicism), they contributed to making this a nice read.
Thanks for sharing!

