06-25-2017, 11:04 PM
Hi Mercedes
What a wonderful poem, so descriptive I can see and hear the entire scene. The ending leaves me intriqued, too. Such an amazing pen. I love the"unolied machine" as they really have that sound, almost the screeching and spinning of a rusty rotor, that also captures how sticky those critters are. Good job, very well worked through. Congrats on your publication. Looks as though it landed it a very fine, befitting place, indeed!
Have a wonderful day!
janine
What a wonderful poem, so descriptive I can see and hear the entire scene. The ending leaves me intriqued, too. Such an amazing pen. I love the"unolied machine" as they really have that sound, almost the screeching and spinning of a rusty rotor, that also captures how sticky those critters are. Good job, very well worked through. Congrats on your publication. Looks as though it landed it a very fine, befitting place, indeed!
Have a wonderful day!
janine
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