First Edit: On Finding Another Dead Literary Journal

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On Finding Another Dead Literary Journal

The publisher employs words like
discontinued,
unprofitable.

The editor
worried about his next job
calls it a shame and moves on. I feel like these first two stanzas needs a little more solid imagery, maybe some visual verbs involving pencils or scribbling, or the body language of the publisher and the editor? For instance the writer shrugs to express his emotion. Maybe the publisher and editor could have their own visual cues to express their exasperation and worry? Or maybe each stanza could be written from the perspective of that person in the chain, that way it has more punch? It's just that "employ words like" and "calls it a shame and moves on" weren't very evocative for me. I like how you humanize the editor a little because that ties back into the poet's initial empathy - that's why I'd like a stronger image to express that.
The writer,
a stoic survivalist, I really like that
shrugs and finds another. like "moves on," I feel like "finds another" is a little plain. I know that relating the actions of these people more colorfully would require making the poem longer though, and I don't know how you feel about that.

At first, the poet empathizes. I'm sure you intentionally didn't begin this with "The Poet" rather than "at first," but some neat freak instinct in me wanted that. Not a big deal though. Also, I think the poet's shift from empathy to anger was an intriguing moment that I wish had received more attention, perhaps even its own explanation?
Then comes the anger:
another possible page has been crumpled, The crumpled page image didn't do much for me. Maybe if it was the metaphor that was crumpled, something to mix it up?
another metaphor denied,
another poem snatched from main street,
beaten, raped;
the body dumped in the river. This crucial section does make me rethink some of my previous comments. The sudden violent imagery here is that much more sudden and violent because the rest of it was so restrained.
And most people don't even notice. I don't know that this is insightful enough to be a more powerful ending than the previous line.