The Prometheus Man
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(06-21-2017, 11:34 PM)Chorus Wrote:  Once,
angels left heaven for a day  
and blazed through the skies
like golden meteors 
leaving contrails of stardust 
in the heavens


Oh, how I spite those glittering roads
for tugging on my chains
and how I turn green
at the sight of seagulls

maybe you could extend the thoughts you had when you wrote this poem a little more.
- I am just guessing:  the first stanza seems to convey the idea of freedom.  but I don´t know why the angels would only once leave their stardust in the sky.   contrails fade in time, ideas don´t (at least not as surely).
- I don´t see how glittering roads can tug on chains. however they could make the subject frustratedly rattle his chains.
- where did the chains come from anyway? self-inflicted/ imposed, imagined/ real…
- the seagulls don´t seem to carry the same meaning as these angels, so maybe some hint can be included
- i think the last two lines are the most interesting in your poem.
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The Prometheus Man - by Chorus - 06-21-2017, 11:34 PM
RE: Title still up for question - by Todd - 06-22-2017, 02:28 AM
RE: Title still up for question - by Chorus - 06-22-2017, 03:06 AM
RE: A Shipwright's Misery - by Richard - 06-23-2017, 12:23 PM
RE: A Shipwright's Misery - by Chorus - 06-23-2017, 02:55 PM
RE: Title still being decided on - by joecarey123 - 06-23-2017, 06:32 PM
RE: The Prometheus Man - by Lizzie - 06-24-2017, 03:46 AM
RE: The Prometheus Man - by Chorus - 06-24-2017, 11:28 AM
RE: The Prometheus Man - by Todd - 06-24-2017, 06:15 AM
RE: The Prometheus Man - by vagabond - 06-24-2017, 11:01 PM



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