06-24-2017, 11:01 PM
(06-21-2017, 11:34 PM)Chorus Wrote: Once,
angels left heaven for a day
and blazed through the skies
like golden meteors
leaving contrails of stardust
in the heavens
Oh, how I spite those glittering roads
for tugging on my chains
and how I turn green
at the sight of seagulls
maybe you could extend the thoughts you had when you wrote this poem a little more.
- I am just guessing: the first stanza seems to convey the idea of freedom. but I don´t know why the angels would only once leave their stardust in the sky. contrails fade in time, ideas don´t (at least not as surely).
- I don´t see how glittering roads can tug on chains. however they could make the subject frustratedly rattle his chains.
- where did the chains come from anyway? self-inflicted/ imposed, imagined/ real…
- the seagulls don´t seem to carry the same meaning as these angels, so maybe some hint can be included
- i think the last two lines are the most interesting in your poem.