Pornography - Edit

[ellajam]

This short poem says it but not in an obvious manner. The end may give some readers a bit of a problem, but a second or third reading clarifies the situation depicted here.

Not much for a huge commentary in this. The diction presents no touch moments for all the words are simple, and to go on and on on the theme of the poem would be overdoing it a bit.

Thanks and take care!

PS

Keep on writing!

Had thoughts about leaving off that last line/word, but was not confident the idea would get across without it.  Maybe better without, though:  if explanation in crit is bad, how much worse explanation in the work itself? 

Yes, I think you could drop the last line.