Beneath a Red Hood (Revision 2.1)

[Richard]

Yeah, I completely understand your point. It is a hard equilibrium to reach sometimes. You don't want to be too simple with a poem, but you also don't want things to get too convoluted either. I've been guilty of both throughout the years. May be if you do go back to the bricks in the first stanza, add another stanza after that expanding on the image. That way you get to keep bricks, but then can also give the reader a couple more hints about the speaker.

Just a thought,
Richard