06-21-2017, 12:18 PM
(06-19-2017, 12:03 PM)Szczepan Wrote: She spoke in words like simile festsThe message I took away from this is that while you are in love with this person, she has opened you up to artistic ideas which you don't understand or that you repress, which angers you.
and
Her sketches reminded me of Rorschach Tests
I was entranced and a little hornswoggled
Mainly self-inflicted
but
hopelessly mind boggled.
Emotions bottled up, things bottomed out
This expression thing. What’s it about?
So
my own cacophonies, I screeched
Finger paintings, I bleached
Still
I’m in other ways frustrated
with what I have created.
The only thing I really didn't like in this was the word "hornswoggled". It reminds me of slang from the 1600's, doesn't fit with the poem, and sounds absolutely ridiculous. Ridiculous is not bad, but the tone of this poem is not "ridiculous".

