The Door (Complete Revised Edit)
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Days are repeating like dusty old records.
I can't keep tracks, they're nothing more than emotions sung aloud.
I've heard a thousand smiles fade,
and a hundred dreams wither away.

Keep looking ever deeper dear, 
to all that lies beneath.
My skin's surface,
a facade,
this happiness you see.

Now I understand;
this just wasn't meant to be.

I'm a prisoner of the past
and my cell guard is the future.
Death is calling out to me,
how can I subdue her?

I already was there,
and far I ventured to come back.
I vowed I'd never return to that place;
where my soul is empty and black.

I stared into her eyes,
felt their unforgiving gaze
and soon enough I disappeared
into a somber daze.

Inside I saw my future,
and suddenly I knew.
Everything I'd built
was all destroyed by you.

I wish you knew forgiveness,
a dear old friend of mine;
one who guided me through darkness
and taught me to be kind.

The cheap gold ring I gave you,
it's meaning loyal and true;
the track played twice as slow that day
with me so close to you.

A little while later
the tears flowed down my face
as I watched my promise
roll down your back
into the sewer grate.

My puzzle incomplete
more pieces fell away.
I tried to fill the holes
but you revelled in my shame.

I don't know how to say it
please stop asking me to stay
you picked my pieces up that night
and threw them all away.

I stare into the mirror
hating what I see,
I think of all the ones I love,
will they remember me?

I take a deep breath
and I dream of paradise;
a place I'd never enter
if I went on living life.

Inside I'm alone,
and the fear takes hold as Death
slowly beckons once more.

This time as she extends 
a comforting hand
I walk into her door.

Original Poem:

The days play over, like records on repeat.
I lose track of the numbers, they mean nothing to me.
A thousand smiles slip through my fingers;
a hundred dreams of happiness linger.

I hold up the mask,
I live with the pain.
I've accepted the fact
they won't remember my name.

Past memories sting,
but so does the future.
Death is still whispering;
now I cannot subdue her.

I was already there;
I came back from the brink.
I stared into her eyes,
and tried hard not to blink.

I saw what you were,
not what I knew.
I looked around
destroyed by you.

I wish you would tell me;
what are your intentions?
Stop trying to pull me
in a hundred directions.

My spirit is fragile,
my heart insecure,
prodding reminders 
I'll never be pure.

Tarnished and used
you covered me in dirt,
when all I ever wanted
was for you to heal my hurt.

You stole every piece of me;
you took it all away,
now as I look into your eyes
you're asking me to stay.

I don't know how to say it;
I don't know how to show
that one way or another,
you'll have to let me go.

I stare at myself
and see misery pictured;
and I wonder to myself:
Would anyone miss her?

I take a deep breath
and I dream of release;
But also of all I'd miss,
and things I'd never see.

My hands are shaking
but my mind is sure.
I stare at Death's face,
and I walk through her door
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Messages In This Thread
The Door (Complete Revised Edit) - by Flowerchild1093 - 06-20-2017, 09:55 PM
RE: The Door - by Todd - 06-20-2017, 11:11 PM
RE: The Door - by Flowerchild1093 - 06-20-2017, 11:38 PM
RE: The Door - by Todd - 06-20-2017, 11:48 PM
RE: The Door - by Flowerchild1093 - 06-21-2017, 12:02 AM
RE: The Door (Complete Revised Edit) - by Richard - 06-26-2017, 06:47 AM
RE: The Door (Complete Revised Edit) - by Todd - 06-26-2017, 11:19 PM



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