First Edit: Dying Alone

First Edit: Dying Alone

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#15

06-20-2017, 12:47 PM

Hey all,
I had a tremendously difficult time revising this one, so I went in a completely different direction with it. I kept the title and a slightly changed first line, but then went from there. I really do feel that in the original I got bogged down with the format (sonnet), so I just let loose with this version. Feel free to let me know if it's an improvement.

Cheers,
Richard

Time is the best editor.

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First Edit: Dying Alone - by Richard - 05-28-2017, 05:51 AM

RE: Dying Alone - by Lizzie - 06-01-2017, 02:12 AM

RE: Dying Alone - by Richard - 06-02-2017, 12:51 PM

RE: Dying Alone - by Lizzie - 06-02-2017, 03:29 PM

RE: Dying Alone - by just mercedes - 06-02-2017, 04:14 PM

RE: Dying Alone - by Richard - 06-02-2017, 09:37 PM

RE: Dying Alone - by Achebe - 06-05-2017, 08:23 PM

RE: Dying Alone - by Richard - 06-06-2017, 10:59 AM

RE: Dying Alone - by Jana - 06-06-2017, 09:42 PM

RE: Dying Alone - by Richard - 06-06-2017, 09:58 PM

RE: Dying Alone - by Jana - 06-06-2017, 10:15 PM

RE: Dying Alone - by Richard - 06-07-2017, 11:08 AM

RE: Dying Alone - by Flowerchild1093 - 06-11-2017, 12:35 AM

RE: Dying Alone - by Richard - 06-12-2017, 01:35 AM

RE: First Edit: Dying Alone - by Richard - 06-20-2017, 12:47 PM

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