06-17-2017, 03:27 AM
Refrain from explaining your poem (i.e. "another dad poem").
Again, I adore the poem as is and wouldn't change much. Maybe runny nose to some other bodily fluid (heh) like terse tears or savory saliva.
But I agree with the poster who said this poem could be so much more than just "a dad poem" (if you hadn't explained it
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I'm a fairly new mom too. So i am enmeshed in your whimsicality about parenthood. But your poem(s) are more than just that.
Keep at it! And let the poems stand on their own. You'll see the interpretations others see and maybe you'll be pleasantly surprised if not astounded by yourself and what others see.
Again, I adore the poem as is and wouldn't change much. Maybe runny nose to some other bodily fluid (heh) like terse tears or savory saliva.
But I agree with the poster who said this poem could be so much more than just "a dad poem" (if you hadn't explained it
)I'm a fairly new mom too. So i am enmeshed in your whimsicality about parenthood. But your poem(s) are more than just that.
Keep at it! And let the poems stand on their own. You'll see the interpretations others see and maybe you'll be pleasantly surprised if not astounded by yourself and what others see.