06-16-2017, 09:45 AM
Consistency, veracity
with him had died
He’d only be truthful
when he said that he lied
I read it backwards after reading it forwards because the ending was the best part. For some reason it made more sense to me this way. Either way it feels like it is missing 'something' which might be a part of your purpose; so do not add to it. The idea of a ghost around his widow without her knowing and her twiddling with his work is very allusionary and what comes to my mind when I read this. I hope I am not being presumptuous. I have a suggestion for Pinocchio's nose so PM me because I'm too embarrassed to tell it to everyone and fear my critique being deleted as garbage.
with him had died
He’d only be truthful
when he said that he lied
I read it backwards after reading it forwards because the ending was the best part. For some reason it made more sense to me this way. Either way it feels like it is missing 'something' which might be a part of your purpose; so do not add to it. The idea of a ghost around his widow without her knowing and her twiddling with his work is very allusionary and what comes to my mind when I read this. I hope I am not being presumptuous. I have a suggestion for Pinocchio's nose so PM me because I'm too embarrassed to tell it to everyone and fear my critique being deleted as garbage.