Third Edit: Lost Dreams

[Lizzie]

Second Edit:

Lost Dream

Where has our hope gone? Hope is actually a very non-specific word, like beauty/beautiful -- it's not precise and, therefore, comes close to conveying nothing at all. But, I like the hope/plague idea...maybe pair this sentence with another line where you clarify a little more what the hope was or bring that vague idea into come kind of focus.

Another idea would be to make "Where has our hope gone?" into the title, and then you can deal with scenarios and specifics in the body of the poem, letting the big concept stay hovering above it all. I don't feel like "Lost Dream" says anything the first line doesn't.

Did it try to migrate
for winter I don't think you need to mention the seasonal change, it's implied in migration
on a broken wing? Bird with a broken wing is extremely cliche. Comparing hope to a bird has been done quite a bit. This stanza is the weakest part of the poem for me. 

Or did it burrow
into rotten meat
so it could fly again? -- to be re-born, gestate, etc. I see where you're going with the bird image above and the fly image here...my preference would be to focus on the maggot element here to lead into the plague idea coming, but that's just my preference.

This stanza and the previous one feel unnaturally truncated. More isn't always better, but I think you could flesh your ideas out in some more interesting language.

Perhaps it’ll come back to us, "come back" could be swapped out for a stronger verb with more action/motion
silent and dangerous,
like a plague. Nice ending that ties in with the stanza above, flies bringing sickness

Hi, Richard. This ending is the best of the three. Hope can be tough to eradicate, like a plague.

I like that you're using varied images to explore your idea.

Hope some of this helps,

Lizzie