06-13-2017, 02:07 AM
Hi, Richard. I always enjoy your poetry and your critiques.
Your pen's voice seems familiar (though I'm sure you are a stranger),
it makes for warmth and security when I read your poetry.
Lost Dream
Where has our hope gone? I like how this starts out, makes me wonder what the hope is and who has the power to bring it back.
Did it try to migrate
for winter
on a broken wing? Made me think about the swan.
Or did it burrow
into rotten meat I'm not sure how hope can do this, or the motive of a speaker to ask.
so it could fly again?
Perhaps it’ll come back to us,
silent and dangerous,
like a plague. I giggled at this.
I was puzzled by the title and how it fits with the poem.Who controls this thing we call Hope? Do we? The last line reminded me of a short conversation I had with a kind librarian, that is why I giggled. I like your poetry.
janine
Your pen's voice seems familiar (though I'm sure you are a stranger),
it makes for warmth and security when I read your poetry.
Lost Dream
Where has our hope gone? I like how this starts out, makes me wonder what the hope is and who has the power to bring it back.
Did it try to migrate
for winter
on a broken wing? Made me think about the swan.
Or did it burrow
into rotten meat I'm not sure how hope can do this, or the motive of a speaker to ask.
so it could fly again?
Perhaps it’ll come back to us,
silent and dangerous,
like a plague. I giggled at this.
I was puzzled by the title and how it fits with the poem.Who controls this thing we call Hope? Do we? The last line reminded me of a short conversation I had with a kind librarian, that is why I giggled. I like your poetry.
janine
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