Fifth Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park

[Richard]

Hey Keith,
Thanks for the feedback. I especially appreciate what you said about the ending. I am actually glad to see that people think the ending is weak because
I wasn't sure about the ending's strength. I plan on addressing that in the revision.

Thanks again,
Richard

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Hey all,
I made some changes to this one. I played around with the ending, so please let me know if it works or not.

Thanks in advance,
Richard