06-11-2017, 10:54 AM
Hi Lizzie, thank you for the comments and the close read. I'll clean up some of the areas you mention on revision. I should be able to fix some of the sentence structure. As far as the ending goes, I was thinking of the immediate sexualized context and playing it off of the refrain in my mind--Grandmother, what big ____ you have. I'll give it some more thought.
Much appreciated.
Best,
Todd
Much appreciated.
Best,
Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
