Perversion
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(06-10-2017, 05:21 PM)Brownlie Wrote:  
(05-30-2017, 08:00 AM)Richard Wrote:  Perversion

I can feel my age - you can or you feel it. Does she give a flying piece of roasted poop?
like a nervous adolescent undoing a bra. -- Bleh, so what? 

Do I kiss her neck,
turn off the lights,
or take off my pants? -- Gotta take off pants if you want to have sex. kinda like logistics. 

I want to think my choice matters. -- What choice is there? Are you giving her drugs or something? idk, it's bumpin uglies. Gross if the speaker is giving her drugs or something. 

Then it's over:
a mess, an apology,
and I'm red faced.
I feel with a vague certainty
that our bodies have limitations.

I'm scared, 
I know this will happen again; 
actually, part of me
yearns
for an even worse ending.
idk, i don't like the title "perversion."  I'm not a big fan of yearners in general. I mean whatever. Lots of crap is screwed up. Just try not to be an a-hole or something.
Steady on Brownlie. You are losing the plot in favour of your own ambitions. Result for you, but remember that it is not about you...it is about the poem. Mod.
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Messages In This Thread
Perversion - by Richard - 05-30-2017, 08:00 AM
RE: Perversion - by thegaslights - 05-30-2017, 01:58 PM
RE: Perversion - by Richard - 05-30-2017, 09:20 PM
RE: Perversion - by Todd - 05-31-2017, 03:23 AM
RE: Perversion - by Richard - 05-31-2017, 08:06 AM
RE: Perversion - by tectak - 06-05-2017, 08:43 PM
RE: Perversion - by Richard - 06-06-2017, 11:09 AM
RE: Perversion - by crow - 06-06-2017, 11:58 PM
RE: Perversion - by Richard - 06-07-2017, 10:02 PM
RE: Perversion - by Brownlie - 06-10-2017, 05:21 PM
RE: Perversion - by tectak - 06-11-2017, 03:45 AM



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