Water and Sky (Thread Closed)

Water and Sky (Thread Closed)

Ivoryirwin
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06-10-2017, 08:18 AM

Newbie here, so don't take my advice too seriously. I loved it, but I wasn't fond of you ending the first two stanzas with the same two words, it didn't flow too well. I also don't think all the stanzas rhymed too well. Awesome job, keep writing.

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RE: Water and Sky - by rowens - 12-14-2016, 02:53 PM

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RE: Water and Sky - by keeper - 04-26-2017, 07:45 AM

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RE: Water and Sky - by Jana - 06-06-2017, 04:42 AM

RE: Water and Sky - by Ivoryirwin - 06-10-2017, 08:18 AM

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RE: Water and Sky - by Keith - 06-17-2017, 04:50 AM

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