06-10-2017, 06:57 AM
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Hi Keith,
This is a nice creation of character, and you carefully don't allow extraneous detail to detract from the humanity of the situation. It's written a little like a scene from a film and is very easy to picture. Nicely done.
Although I was slightly disappointed, upon reading the title, that it wasn't about the woeful performance of the Tories and the decimation of UKIP
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I could do the decimation of UKIP with a kind of Green Room (the movie) type vibe. I would enjoy that one.
Thank you for the suggested edits and feedback all your suggestions work well for me I will do a quick edit on the original. Thanks Leanne.
Hi Keith,
This is a nice creation of character, and you carefully don't allow extraneous detail to detract from the humanity of the situation. It's written a little like a scene from a film and is very easy to picture. Nicely done.
Although I was slightly disappointed, upon reading the title, that it wasn't about the woeful performance of the Tories and the decimation of UKIP
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I could do the decimation of UKIP with a kind of Green Room (the movie) type vibe.
I would enjoy that one.Thank you for the suggested edits and feedback all your suggestions work well for me I will do a quick edit on the original. Thanks Leanne.
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