About your bravery, Davina

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Hi Tiger the Lion,

Your poem made me smile. I have to admit, I also looked up Davina, before catching the feminine of David. I was thinking it sounded like chocolate for some reason...Strangely, whenever I see the word Goliath, I think immediately of the insect, not the Biblical character, so I threw myself off. Not a flaw with the poem, just with me.

About your bravery, Davina
 
Sometimes your eyes                     Maybe only "your eyes"
move through mine—                    this is scary in itself, that someone might see/think things that another sees or thinks at any given moment,
                                                      almost imprisoning...
throw off real time                          shorten it to "tossing"?
in anticipation
of another Goliath.                          this could indicate three hidden scenarios: 1. Goliath was already there
                                                                                                                       2. A sort of suspicious, just-in-case "tit for tat"?
It slays me.                                     adorably cute last liner.                              3. It was GOD working it all
                                                       the speaker is the giant or they are just really laughing. Clever!


Sorry I couldn't be more helpful. I am trying to learn how to impliment the strike through option, but I am failing.
Perhaps shorten the title, too?

Best wishes,
Janine