Fifth Edit: The Swans in Wentworth Park

[Richard]

Hey homer1950,
Thanks for the feedback. I was actually very curious if the last two lines worked, and this was one of the main reasons I posted this poem. You're the second person to be comment on them, so I plan on targeting those in the revision. As well, I appreciate what you said about the language, and will keep that in mind moving forward.

Thanks again,
Richard