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Tiger the Lion

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06-08-2017, 11:17 AM

(06-07-2017, 09:18 PM)ellajam Wrote: dad spinning Dorsey
old-fashioned
radio plays Jumping Jack Flash

I think I see it as you intended, Ella. But I'm tripping on the line break at L2. I can't help but read "old-fashioned-radio"
Paul

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wheels turn - by ellajam - 06-07-2017, 09:18 PM

RE: wheels turn - by just mercedes - 06-08-2017, 05:37 AM

RE: wheels turn - by ellajam - 06-08-2017, 08:15 AM

RE: wheels turn - by Tiger the Lion - 06-08-2017, 11:17 AM

RE: wheels turn - by ellajam - 06-08-2017, 05:21 PM

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