06-06-2017, 09:58 PM
Hey Jana,
Thanks for the feedback. You're right about the third line. The mystery is the resolved path. In the third stanza the trail is devoid of light because the speaker's wife has died. This is also why the word "lonely" is used in the line 12. That is also why the second stanza deals with the images of fear (the fear of dying/ being left alone after the speaker's wife has died) and death (the speaker's wife has died). The more I read critiques for this poem, the more I think this is the type of piece where I knew what I was trying to communicate, but failed somewhere along the way with effectively communicating my ideas.
Thanks again for the feedback,
Richard
Thanks for the feedback. You're right about the third line. The mystery is the resolved path. In the third stanza the trail is devoid of light because the speaker's wife has died. This is also why the word "lonely" is used in the line 12. That is also why the second stanza deals with the images of fear (the fear of dying/ being left alone after the speaker's wife has died) and death (the speaker's wife has died). The more I read critiques for this poem, the more I think this is the type of piece where I knew what I was trying to communicate, but failed somewhere along the way with effectively communicating my ideas.
Thanks again for the feedback,
Richard