what i need
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(05-28-2017, 10:11 PM)RiverNotch Wrote:  but this is what i need, or Visions of Alexandra


at the reception
   of the petrified forest,      bamboo
                                     in a pot
RiverNotch,

I read this poem an loved it even if "bamboo in a pot" could be considered cryptic or disconnected. It works well for me and gives the ending a nice Haiku feel.

Keep writing.

Luna
In your own, each bone comes alive
the skeleton jangles in its perfunctory sleeve....

(Chris Martin)
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Messages In This Thread
what i need - by RiverNotch - 05-28-2017, 10:11 PM
RE: what i need - by LunaDeLore - 06-02-2017, 12:58 AM
RE: what i need - by Tiger the Lion - 06-02-2017, 05:45 AM
RE: what i need - by just mercedes - 06-02-2017, 05:17 PM
RE: what i need - by RiverNotch - 06-03-2017, 06:32 PM



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