4th Annual Poems About Suicide Month
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(05-28-2017, 06:58 AM)dukealien Wrote:  ...  Back to mechanics:
double action is right out,
the muzzle will wobble all over
trying to pull the trigger through
with a thumb.
So single action, which will leave
me standing in the gunroom with
a loaded cocked revolver.
Damn!  I can’t do this
against all the ingrained
weapon safety training
this is brilliant. I wonder if splitting the last 2 lines as ...all the / ingrained / weapon safety training and ending the poem there might not be a better idea. it's a bit of a comedown from there.
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe
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4th Annual Poems About Suicide Month - by Todd - 04-30-2017, 02:01 PM
RE: 4th Annual Poems About Suicide Month - by just mercedes - 04-30-2017, 02:15 PM
RE: 4th Annual Poems About Suicide Month - by just mercedes - 05-01-2017, 01:35 PM
RE: 4th Annual Poems About Suicide Month - by just mercedes - 05-02-2017, 05:13 AM
RE: 4th Annual Poems About Suicide Month - by just mercedes - 05-03-2017, 05:31 AM
RE: 4th Annual Poems About Suicide Month - by just mercedes - 05-03-2017, 05:59 AM
RE: 4th Annual Poems About Suicide Month - by just mercedes - 05-06-2017, 09:01 AM
RE: 4th Annual Poems About Suicide Month - by just mercedes - 05-06-2017, 11:46 AM
RE: 4th Annual Poems About Suicide Month - by just mercedes - 05-18-2017, 11:38 AM
RE: 4th Annual Poems About Suicide Month - by Achebe - 05-31-2017, 04:16 PM
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RE: 4th Annual Poems About Suicide Month - by saltysami - 06-29-2017, 06:05 PM
RE: 4th Annual Poems About Suicide Month - by just mercedes - 01-28-2018, 07:43 AM



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