Perversion

[thegaslights]

I like this. It's a clever and unexpected comparison, done well. It's something everyone (of a certain age) can relate to and read into. I only have a couple comments. 

First, the title reminds me a little bit of a dad-joke style pun. The poem is at times funny and the pun is of course intended, but for me it didn't quite match the overall tone of the poem itself. This is a style choice though and I can see a good argument for keeping it. 


[quote="Richard" pid='229619' dateline='1496098836']
Perversion

I can feel my age
like a nervous adolescent undoing a bra. damn. nice work. super clear but still interesting and unexpected.  

Do I kiss her neck,
turn off the lights,
or take off my pants? these three lines are lacking the punch and double duty of the rest of the poem. Which is fine for narrative building. Just nitpicking here. But everything after this can be interpreted in both scenarios of the failing health of age and sexual inexperience.

I want to think my choice matters. i like this as a thinking line. I didn't immediately like it, but I'm coming back to it more. 

Then it's over:
a mess, an apology,
and I'm red faced.
I feel with a vague certainty vague, eh? seems pretty specific in your telling 
that our bodies have limitations.

I'm scared,
I know this will happen again;
actually, part of me
yearns
for an even worse ending.  i would cut "even"

Fun read, thanks!