Eyes

Eyes

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#20

05-29-2017, 04:07 AM

The content is great! There are definite flow issues though. This could almost just be a solid paragraph as opposed to a poem. I think you need to open it up more. Let imagery take over, and expand on this concept milking it for all its worth.

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Eyes - by JaredEggo - 02-08-2017, 04:20 AM

RE: Eyes - by canofworms - 02-09-2017, 12:43 PM

RE: Eyes - by Lizzie - 02-11-2017, 10:54 AM

RE: Eyes - by worros - 03-07-2017, 03:10 PM

RE: Eyes - by operadiva - 03-10-2017, 05:33 AM

RE: Eyes - by Powder - 03-12-2017, 03:07 AM

RE: Eyes - by Brownlie - 03-12-2017, 03:47 PM

RE: Eyes - by burrealist - 03-22-2017, 09:42 AM

RE: Eyes - by Graca - 03-26-2017, 12:24 AM

RE: Eyes - by nibbed - 03-26-2017, 01:01 AM

RE: Eyes - by Franklin'sMan - 03-27-2017, 05:56 AM

RE: Eyes - by Richard - 04-02-2017, 05:38 AM

RE: Eyes - by C.los - 04-24-2017, 09:23 AM

RE: Eyes - by wordgobbler - 04-26-2017, 12:55 PM

RE: Eyes - by AttnAttack - 04-29-2017, 03:09 AM

RE: Eyes - by Radetof.Yahska - 04-30-2017, 06:18 AM

RE: Eyes - by QueenFaye - 04-30-2017, 05:21 PM

RE: Eyes - by inmostcave - 05-01-2017, 09:43 AM

RE: Eyes - by Josiah - 05-05-2017, 06:40 AM

RE: Eyes - by spiritthebrave - 05-29-2017, 04:07 AM

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