On 'Gandu Bagicha'

[Lizzie]

Edit: No drug use is implied in the poem. It's just how Gandu Bagicha made me feel. Maybe it would help if you had a look at the Dhasal translation linked in the first post.

It's not about drug use? Errr....that sets me back a little bit. Couple of things:

1. "Junk courses through you" is going to massively predispose the reader to that interpretation. And you say that word, junk, in each stanza. If you mean rubbish, litter, candy wrappers, etc., then IMO you must choose another word.

2. You can't rely on the original poem to speak for you. Your poem has to do the work on its own to convince or persuade the reader.

I'll be back (yes, again) once I figure out what's going on...