misplaced summer Day in May for Ray (edit)

[ellajam]

I think there's enough connection through the shower to more than qualify.
But there's always a  connection in haiku even if two, or even three, objects are described:
1. They are being observed at the same time by the writer.
2. They are being read/observed at the same time by the reader.
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Two examples of two things connected by a third,
just like the shower connects the worm and the lilac:
(Analysis stolen from various sources including myself)

This one connects through "quiet".
The chrysanthemum is a metaphor for order hence peace (the Japanese Emperor
sits on the Chrysanthemum Throne" probably named for this reason;
the tea, as it's a metaphor for ceremony hence order;
and the monk as he/she is a symbol for meditative practice hence the peace/quiet
brought about through meditation:

Basho:
A monk sips morning tea
it's quiet
the chrysanthemum's flowering

This one connects through the dress, as it's draped over the gold screen and
blown by the wind:
Buson:
Over the gold screen
Whose silk gauze dress?
The autumn wind.
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And one where the two images are connected only by the writer's (and reader's) observation:
Basho:
A cuckoo cries
and through a thicket
bamboo

This seems like it is directed at me. If that is the case, I can only speak to my opinion and that is that, in its current form, I would like to see a better connection.

Ha, my thread, I'll take it as directed at me. Regardless of what sparked it, thanks for the post, ray, I'll think about how I can use it help this one along.