Second Edit: dying thoughts

[vagabond]

First Edit:

dying thought

back home
a sunset was a red traffic lights             should that be singular (a light)?                     

holding back my friends and me
and the night felt like it was ours:
cheap drinks
awful pickup lines
the kind of love that seems endless      somehow I´d write "a feeling of love" or something similar instead of "a kind of love", can´t even explain very well. maybe because a feeling is more prone to ending than a concept of love.
until it ends

years later
a sunset was like divine permission         
to rest:
drinks with the boys
loud music
eventually sleep
then i would report to work
happy
that it paid enough
that i could still go home
to visit

i want to believe
all sunsets offer a warmth           i kind of miss the fiery and cardinal red now.. why eliminate the longing and passion?
worth embracing
i want to believe
i won't die alone
far from home

but the truth is enough to kill a man      that line I´d leave out. not because it´s not important, but because it can be read clear enough in the lines above (in my opinion). and the reader could draw his/ her own conclusion, leaving the poem open to either hopeful or fatalistic view.

I think the revision is much clearer and stronger.