Second Edit: dying thoughts

Second Edit: dying thoughts

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05-22-2017, 11:20 AM

Hey Janine and Wjames,
Thanks for the feedback. It's funny because I was struggling with whether or not to make those lines similes or metaphors., so I appreciated the comments on that. And Janine, your suggestion about the first line has really got me thinking.

Thanks again,
Richard

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Second Edit: dying thoughts - by Richard - 05-20-2017, 12:46 PM

RE: dying thoughts - by vagabond - 05-20-2017, 08:49 PM

RE: dying thoughts - by Richard - 05-20-2017, 11:37 PM

RE: dying thoughts - by Wjames - 05-22-2017, 05:22 AM

RE: dying thoughts - by nibbed - 05-22-2017, 07:27 AM

RE: dying thoughts - by Richard - 05-22-2017, 11:20 AM

RE: First Edit: dying thoughts - by vagabond - 05-22-2017, 06:08 PM

RE: First Edit: dying thoughts - by Todd - 05-23-2017, 03:21 AM

RE: First Edit: dying thoughts - by Richard - 05-23-2017, 04:24 AM

RE: First Edit: dying thoughts - by billy - 05-23-2017, 11:46 AM

RE: First Edit: dying thoughts - by Richard - 05-24-2017, 10:58 AM

RE: Second Edit: dying thoughts - by Richard - 05-25-2017, 02:04 PM

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