05-20-2017, 06:23 PM
(05-20-2017, 02:03 AM)nibbed Wrote: Revised
Humanism is
the result of mankind
thinking they are all that
when they are just victims so .. humanisn isn´t the result of mankind at all?
of a cuppa every bit of nothing
that has been fed to them i think in order to connect that to the metaphor in the following 2 lines ("free food") you could state the price of whatever humanism fed to the poem´s subject. i think you´d have an answer to that
from the time they were cruelly yanked
from mother's free food.
No matter what chalice of lies
that has been dished out i would leave the word "that" out
we are here for one purpose:
to choose or reject
a Mighty God who loves us
Who wants us to choose Him
so one day we can spend
an eternity with Him
in His perfect heaven.
"every bit of nothing... all lies", those are heavy statements!
the message of your poem is clear and you show conviction

