Humanism is (Revised)

[Richard]

Hey Janine,
I have to still agree with Todd's initial comment about this poem needing more figurative language. I'll go into more detail below:

Revised


Humanism is

the result of mankind
thinking they are all that -What does "that" mean here?
when they are just victims -I think the image of victims has potential, but needs to be developed more.
of a cuppa every bit of nothing
that has been fed to them
from the time they were cruelly yanked
from mother's free food. -I feel like the image of being yanked from one's mother could work, but you need to add a metaphor or some sort of poetic device to make it stronger.
No matter what chalice of lies
that has been dished out
we are here for one purpose:

to choose or reject
a Mighty God who loves us
Who wants us to choose Him
so one day we can spend
an eternity with Him
in His perfect heaven. -The message in this stanza is clear. However, you need some figurative language here to spice it up (to use a cliche). 

Since this is a basic critique, I didn't want to go into too much detail. I do think you have a decent starting point here for a poem, but it needs some work. You communicated your passion and beliefs in this piece. The next step is to ask yourself how to take those two things and express them more poetically. I hope I wasn't too harsh in this critique.

Keep writing,
Richard