05-19-2017, 04:32 PM
the only word I wondered about was “fine”.. so I thought maybe you could write:
“how it don´t fray anymore that our rope has frayed” that way you´d have a similar repetition as in the 3rd stanza.. although it would change the meaning.
and my use of “fray” as a noun may be wrong, in that case forget it, it was just an idea
anyway, I like how you sculpt those questions in a poem (how it can be that love and heartache fade)
“how it don´t fray anymore that our rope has frayed” that way you´d have a similar repetition as in the 3rd stanza.. although it would change the meaning.
and my use of “fray” as a noun may be wrong, in that case forget it, it was just an idea
anyway, I like how you sculpt those questions in a poem (how it can be that love and heartache fade)